Hello Alesio,
For me there are significant conceptual problems with this poem apart from technical rhyme and meter issues.
The narrator is talking about wanting to join an 18th century poet's idea of utopia from the perspective of the 21st century, but it is really just a sequence of vague and generalized complaints about modern living that have nothing to do with Coleridge, in that, there is no reason why his specific green utopia is desired amongst any other green utopia, and there is nothing very specific about the narrator's hand-waving about the ills of modern life.
Take two readers, and ask them to interpret the phrase "linear models of our living" and see how often they form a similar interpretation. Sure, it might hint of profit margins, mechanization, endless consumption, going against the patterns of nature, but it is all vague pointing, and it can be vague because the poem is saying stuff that has already been said in a similar way.
Because of this lack of substance, I feel the stanzas are unnecessarily drawn out, that is, they are not saying much, but the poem has to fulfill pre-established rhyme and meter constraints.
As you did too, but I for different sake
Portray the wish adjacent to my will,
That is the need to flee modernity,
And find a transatlantic home or dell -
Prose translation: I too, but for different reasons, wish to flee modernity, and find a home in America.
The prose is better than the poetry.
Yeah!
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