Hi David,
Like others I had difficulty with the bird "walking around a bit" and then "at last" taking off after landing in front (presumably, given it might be contemplating its death) of a moving car. I guess this could work if the car stopped, and prior to that was moving slowly enough to stop in time. Maybe this could be hinted at in the poem?
Other than that I found in enjoyable: light and witty. I like that the question it's pondering is Hamlet's (it took me a moment, but the joke is probably is better for that delay), which works nicely for a bird landing in front of a moving car.
Matt
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