I liked the first stanza more than the second. S2L1 felt a bit flat to me and I’m not sure about "laptop light" in S2
And though I can see what you are saying about forecasting and computer power, it needs a lot more than a laptop to make accurate predictions. For any individual farmer looking skyward in a particular spot, then the weather forecast can often seem unreliable. The Met office is trying harder to get people used to thinking in probabilities rather certainties. The weather is too chaotic, even with massive computer power to make helpful predictions much beyond a week or two. But I suspect they are still better than studying groundhogs or cow behaviour.
Given that you have a string of nature poems fermenting just now, I wondered if you thought of bring Robert Fitzroy into the story. He was Captain on Darwin’s Beagle and one of the first people to try to systematically make weather forecasts.
Cheers
Joe
Missed first para
Meant to say I also like the pregnant theme going on in title and first few lines
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