Hi Susan,
I like the general feeling of this and the brevity. I think it works well. While the sense of repetition works quite well too, the direct repetition of specific phrases feels unimaginative to me. I do think that repetition can sometimes work well in poetry, but for me, it just brings it down a little here. I'll add a few comments below. Also, I think "Success" is a better title than "Accomplished".
All the best,
Trev
Succeeding as a poet means you know [good, simple and direct opening line]
you're nobody. Writing your name in water,
you dissipate, dissolving in the flow. [The first three lines move along nicely. I wouldn't change anything there.]
Succeeding as a poet means you know [I'd be inclined to replace "Succeeding as a poet" or maybe even the whole line; for example, something like "It means you seek and somehow grow / by planting rows..."?]
you're planting rows of seedlings in the snow.
Not truth but mere oblivion is Time's daughter. [This line is a bit too opaque for the general vibe of this poem, I think, and "mere oblivion" strains too hard towards the poetic. How about something like "Not truth, but being forgotten,..."?]
Succeeding as a poet means you know. [This repetition would be more palatable if the second one wasn't included, I think. It would give a sense of bringing the poem back to where it started in a satisfying way]
You're nobody, writing your name in water. [I do think you need to vary this line, though. Is anything to be said for changing the "nobody" to "somebody" here? If you don't want to directly imply that there is a big change from the nobody to the somebody, you could simply remove the comma after "somebody" so that it could either refer to a person in general or to the idea of being someone important.]
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