Hi Alex,
I also wanted to try 'dive into the nuts and bolts' with my far more limited wit compared to yourself and the two previous replies, but seeing your clear explanation of the poem in the last comment, I'll just comment my opinion on my favourite part of this poem.
"Then love would blaze through us within a second
Just time enough to scan a silhouette"
Are my favourite verses as I think they perfectly embody the image of fleeting views and pure chaos (which I think is rendered really well with the word 'blaze' instead of 'pass' or 'fly') when dancing in a club. There is a club in Florence called OTEL and the few times I've been there, and looked at anyone therein, authentically matches the way in which your verse describes seeing the narrator's interest. Almost as if that possible one night stand of his was literally just a vague twisting black shadow on beat to the music and any feeling towards them would be as frenzied as the sight.
I know this comment doesn't give much but I really like the poem, and I just wanted to share my thought on your two verses.
Bravo!
Alessio.
P.S
Just saw your reply on Reflected Chances, so thank you for the further clarifications!