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Unread 05-25-2025, 11:12 AM
Jim Moonan Jim Moonan is offline
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Originally Posted by David Callin View Post
...maybe I can do something with the title ... "Stopping by birds on a Shakey evening"? Or "Stopped by a bird on a balmy evening"?
That would be the quickest fix. (I'm never sure if your thread titles are also the poem titles) Perhaps there's a witty Shakespearean-like title that could tie the two "performances" together.

But as is, it doesn't detract from the poem, and in a theatricall way asks the audience/reader to suspend reality and join the alternate reality onstage/on the page — which is pretty cool.

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