[Alessio Boni]

Hi Alex,

This poem is good, although I mostly took it as a satirical piece which is what you intended right?

It gives me a sort of remembrance towards Anacreontic odes, but of course with a modern touch ridiculing the entire 'culture' behind those bacchic celebrations of his, which, as suggested by your poem, can now be felt by literally anyone, unlike then. Its a good duality of encapsulating his hedonistic rhetoric with the grapes, to then debase it to a common usance in our age.

L14 - 16 communicate this duality the best in my opinion.

I would add though, that the final two verses, starting from "Spring air breathes thick.." could be removed, as I think it kind of drags the poem by a scene which isn't as strong as the prior one, diluting the potence of the sheer immensity of these resources (wine and grapes being for everyone). If you removed it then the strong reflective image of a richness turned commodity would be even stronger as the 'wine freely flows!' You could also keep the half verse "across your lips." as I think it truly gives the final touch and allows the reader to know we can truly SAVOUR such, and of course it concludes the sentence.

Just my opinion, hope this helps!!

Cheers,

Alessio.