Hi Joe,
Just a thought, but if L4 were
I try not to look in the mirror.
You've have ballad metre throughout, which might be rhythmically more satisfying.
Another thought: You might try changing the full-stop at the end of that line to a comma. It adds some variation to the repetition, I think, and maybe gives the line more reason to be there.
"revise" shifts the meaning a little. So, the N would rather ignore the cracks (wrinkles, sagging etc) in their face than try to change or hide them (cosmetic surgery, make-up, rejuvenating creams etc.). I think it's maybe more interesting that previous choices, a little more complex than simply despising them and wanting them gone.
best,
Matt
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