[Richard G]

Hi Alex,

are you missing an apostrophe in L1? Whole Foods' doorway
and (L2) should quince be plural?

The list of fruits is an improvement but I think could still be stronger.
bristled coconuts, ripening/dewy plums, gourmet
figs, quinces, melons, vermilion mangoes,
freckled bananas, then long rows

then long rows - What is lacking, for me, is a sense that N was actively searching for the grapes rather than just observing they were next on the list.

clustered and waiting for our lunch,
stroked smooth in store ritual, each bunch
I think you could swap the order of these two lines.

beneath fluorescent’s gemlike shine.
I agree with Jim (regarding clunkiness.) Also this seems too much like filler now.
Here glows what ancients deemed divine.
Again, these might be a bit more interesting if swapped. But I think more description of the grapes is needed.
A passing thought (I know you've 'dark' later so take as a jumping off point ... or not.)
stroked smooth in store ritual, each bunch
of wine-dark pearls do gemlike shine.
Here glows what ancients deemed divine.

I think the delight/bite by bite couplet is in the wrong place and might (with some tweaking) work better at the end.

Maidens, barefoot in wine dance, did press
the vintage. And Gods and mortals bless
this fruit—from Olympian feast
to corner market, west to east,
the same dark juice that quickened blood
in pharaohs will flow like a flood
across your lips in springtime rush
when vows refresh your lipstick’s blush.
and teeth have pierced the plump delight,
your tongue will purple bite by bite.

Becoming puzzled by west to east (can't join these particular dots.)

RG