Duncan, what the heck do you think that was!
Jim, I’m pleased to know the revision is an improvement for you. Thank you for the comments and suggestions on what works and what could be improved. That’s quite helpful, and hopefully, the new revision is closer to the mark.
Richard, thank you for coming back to this. On the possessive for “Foods’” I didn’t think it was necessary, but it seems to trip some readers, so it’s in now. Thanks for the detailed comments on which lines are working to you and which aren’t, as well as well the suggestions. I’ve now revised again and, hopefully, this version is even better.
Cheers,
…Alex
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