i finished the first section of the book. now, anyone can see from looking at the poems i've posted here that i don't have the best ear for meter. i'm new to it and learning. i think part of the problem is that i speak in a fairly monotone voice (a diagram of my sound waves would have to be pretty close to a straight line). but i had trouble with figuring out the meter in many of the poems. i don't know if i'm just not picking it up or what. but there seemed to be a lot of lines that weren't metrical. is it me?
i like seeing humor used in poems. i guess that comes from being a student of sam gwynn's. and maybe it isn't fair to compare the two use of humor, i mean who could you stack up to my prof. but he seemed to beat the joke to death in a couple of the poems. "Origami" just kept on going until i got tired of it. as did "The Top Priority". which actually brings up an interesting question, how hard is it to write humor and light verse in a longer poem?
jason
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