Just when I was trying to dissuade Andrew from his third category, along you come, Curtis, with those spiky, dissonant lines. It would be easy to carry the "ghost" idea to excess. The ghosts need to be audible, if not visible, before I would care to acknowledge their presence.
I do not think your lines can reasonably be called examples of accentual-syllabic verse. The stress placement is so irregular that I would dub them syllabic. And I've always questioned whether syllabic verse is audibly metrical at all. When lines are sharply enjambed and caesuras erratically placed, syllabic verse sounds indistinguishable from free verse, to my ear.
I didn't comment on the poem before, but I'll venture a word or two now: I thought that it was thematically interesting and that it benefited from lots of lively words, but (as you can guess by now) I disliked the meter.
A.S.
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