Carol, if you heed David's suggestion about dropping one or two periods, you should be able bring this in with fewer keystrokes than Aram Saroyan's one word poem "lighght". (That was the whole poem: lighght.)
Saroyan's poem supposedly got some kind of NEA grant--$1,500 I think, but that was quite a few years ago. What with inflation, as well as the superior pacing of your poem, yours has to be worth much more. Tell Dana Gioia to get his checkbook out!
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