David - Thanks for repeating the primary reason why the 17 syllable count is not necessarily applicable to Haiku written in English. It seems that the link, provided in my first post and a further explanation of this point, provided in my post dated March 30 on this thread, went unnoticed by some.
Strange but I just recently submitted a poem, on this forum, with 4 Haiku and I purposely did it in the 5/7/5 - three line format, complete with seasonal reference. Very neat but strangely not satisfying to me. One or two were but not all four.
Goes to show that you can have all the eliments in place but the poem can just be technically perfect but cold. Further reminds me of that cliche:
"The surgery was a success but the patient died."
I think when I do the revision, I'll try less syllables - not because it's easier (working with less does not make it easy) but becaue the Haiku image may not need more.
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