Peter,
One negative effect that posting on Eratosphere has had on my writing is a locking of my own writing into meter in a way I instinctively know to be too tight. When critting poems by others in a metrical workshop it is usual to expect a conventional use of meter. I particularly enjoy near rhyme but, like perfect rhyme, these depend on local pronunciation. Often what we intend as perfect rhymes are read as near rhymes by others.
I always respond well to your own use of loose meter.
I like the Duffy poem very much. The near rhymes all work easily in my head. The witty onomatopoeia of "yeah yeah yeah" is particularly nice.
This reads as pent to me without any effort.
Thanks for this discussion.
Janet
[This message has been edited by Janet Kenny (edited May 10, 2007).]
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