Quote:
Originally posted by Terese Coe:
Psychic Phenomena
Psychic phenomena,
Tarot and ouija board,
Yeatsian trances,
Clairaudient raps
Metempsychosis or
Metagalactical,
Hit-or-miss cryptograph,
Death overlaps.
Terese
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Not easy to get all of the elements--structural and grammatical--to mesh, is it?
One helpful device, sanctioned by the example of the "Founding Fathers," is to hyphenate words in order to preserve both meter and line:
... Speaking of Satan's re-
Bellion from God: ... [Anthony Hecht]
"... Fosters our growing de-
Linquency rate." [Hecht]
"... Beaten," he said, "by re-
Ligion and sax." [Hecht]
... Problems beneath his Im-
Perial drag. [John Hollander]
... Losing my sleep, and neg-
Lecting my wife. [Paul Pascal]
... Scoring apartheid, pro-
Duced a sage quote, . . . [E. William Seaman]
These examples (and others) all appear in JIGGERY-POKERY, the volume that unleashed this form on the world in 1967.
So I guess you could get away with:
Yeatsian trances, clair-
Audient raps.
(though I might drop the capitalization).
A different problem in:
Metempsychosis or
Metagalactical ...
Might it not be better if the terms were grammatically parallel rather than noun and adjective? "Metempsychotic"? (Perhaps a coined word, but it makes wonderful sense here with its suggestive overtones, and bizarre coinages are obviously not unknown in d-d's.) And why not "boards" while we're at it?
Cheers,
Jan