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Unread 09-19-2004, 08:05 PM
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Private Mann

After Reading the Diaries of Thomas Mann

Have you called on Thomas Mann at home?
Writer, hypochondriac and doer,
great-hearted snob, gourmet, a vain coxcomb,
thinker, self-absorbed, but still with fewer
faults than most, a real celebrity
who boldly faced down Hitler with direct
instinctive, unabashed integrity,
which places him among this world’s elect.
Atrocities aroused great consternation.
When possible he tried to save his friends
and Jung’s essays earned downright condemnation,
he said, for passive aid to fascist ends.
“Disingenuous self-justification”
exposed, he said, Jung’s real affiliation.

Critique of "Private Mann"

There are some good historical and character observations in this poem but the poem is half developed. Apart from the misspelling of the final word, the punctuation leaves much to be desired. There should be a period after "most" in line 5.
This poem needs work.
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