[Patricia A. Marsh]

Originally posted by Mary Meriam:
I know the four-line things I posted need work. Don't feel like scanning them now, but maybe later.

While you're working on the 4-beats in your "four-line things", you might want to consider what you're actually saying in your poems. I mean: Look, for instance, at your first Wu poem . . . where you say, "Shake trees! Shake it all down! / I'm hungry for kiwi,...[etc.]" Whoa, Mary! Kiwi, like money, doesn't grow on trees. Kiwi's a vine-fruit.

I like your idea about the work theme, but I think a Wu Song can also be about love.

Hopefully, Wu Songs can also be about the love of work!

Here's a quote from Zeiser's book:

That's strange! The quote doesn't appear on this screen where I'm typing. Is that what happens when you cut-and-paste? I wouldn't know . . . because I've yet to learn <u>how</u> to cut-and-paste.

Why didn't I post this sooner? I had to type it. Lazy. Sorry.

Oops! Sorry! Forget what I said about "cut-and-paste". The fact that the quote you posted doesn't appear on my screen right now probably has a technological explanation. It <u>did</u> appear in the main "Wu Songs" thread. In any case, I didn't agree with Ms. Zeiser's likening Wu Songs to haiku. Sorry 'bout dat, too.

Mary

Have a nice day!

All best--
Patricia