Their hope, to draw together their last breath
Here's an example of a very effective inversion (or apparent inversion) -- putting 'together' after 'draw' rather than after 'breath' would be bad if it merely secured the rhyme, but it also suggests that they draw together *with* their last breath -- one of the features I admire most in this.
Do I hear an echo of Heraclitus in the last line?
Thanks for posting this, Tim.
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