Both are so good they scare me. This is turning into a wonderful learning experience. Thank you, Tim and Dick, for thinking of it and doing the heavy lifting.
A few nit-type questions/comments regarding Deborah's poem. Dick, you indicated that L6 is a syllable short. Sorry, but I don't see it. Line 5 is short, but I regard that as a headless line. Is there some confusion here, or am I even dumber than usual?
Similar deep and penetrating question on L12. I have no trouble scanning "easier" as three syllables and feeling comfortable with the meter. What am I missing?
Finally, while I like the idea of the metric upset in the last two lines giving a feel that it does "hold the bright ship back", somehow the two extra syllables in L13 make it so clunky (every time I read it I elided to "to anchor daylight, hold the bright ship back") that - my feeling - the break in meter is too disturbing and defeats its purpose. (I had no trouble with the extra syllable in L14 -thought that worked.) Thanks again.
Michael
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