Robt -
I assume you meant, "...no problem with line 13."
Interestingly enough, when I read the couplet by itself, as you have typed it, it does sweep and sing. When I go back and read it in context again, after L11 and L12, it clunks again. Don't quite know why. I guess I get those iambs plugged into my brain and can't hear anything else (if it was simply a longer iambic hex line it wouldn't throw me - it's the breaks in the meter that give me trouble).
Michael
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