Well done, Chris. I trust you won't take offense if I suggest that the poem you pay tribute to is superior, however. What makes Mr. Gwynn's poem superior, I believe, has a lot to do with the consistent tone he takes in each of his lines. Each line perfectly mimics and satirizes the way the writers of tv listings might condense the plot of a particular play (line 1 of the sonnet was apparently from a real tv listing). Your poem, though, simply presents a series of very humorous plot summaries, but only some of them use the dead-pan plot summary device, while others achieve their humor by broader, less dead-pan comedy.
I know you weren't looking for a crit of your poem, Chris, and I make my observation only to mention a strength in the Gwynn poem that I hadn't considered earlier. (For the record, I've already seen a couple of other sonnets you've written that are wonderfully skilled and funny).
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