I too have enjoyed this for some time, and still smile on rereading it. But (even recognizing that this is not "Deep End") I always falter at l.4, as did Roger. Why not:
....Two couples lose their way on a summer night?
The (slight) variation with the anapest seems appropriate anyway.
Jan
[This message has been edited by Jan D. Hodge (edited May 02, 2002).]
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