I think "mother's name" is a bit of a problem, and to my eye so is "the same / as knives might carve the carcass of a beast," because an animal would be carved with care and for utility... All I mean is that in both cases I'm having to squint a bit to make it work. I suppose the rather prim "bowels released" seems at odds with the colloquial "arse cheeks," but the second is a quotation, so their coming from different registers of speech needn't be a problem.
But the point has already been hinted at: One feels somehow inhuman quibbling over a few slightly out of focus moments in a poem that none would really bear is it were any more sharply focused.
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