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Originally posted by peterjb:
From some detail mentioned by Susan when this was discussed in The Deep End, I surmise that her very effective poem was inspired by the earlier version.
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Yes, it was the original painting we looked at that had the cutwork oversleeves, though, indeed, there was no discernible mirror that I could see. I think it is the the fact that it is the cutwork which is stiffened with braid that makes "cutwork oversleeves" necessary, rather than "cutwork over sleeves" regardless of metric requirements. In any case, this reads nicely to me as two midline trochees and I like the line as it is.
Oliver.