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Unread 12-20-2003, 02:02 PM
Richard Wakefield Richard Wakefield is offline
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The first stanza is a beauty, mother and wife representing his humble beginnings and his new status. The second stanza is skillful but takes me in the wrong direction. Granted, the traditional place for the turn is after that second stanza, so the change of scene would seem to be in the right place. But I don't really need to hear any more about him, or at least I don't need to hear these things about him. In short, it feels like filler. Maybe part of the reason for that is the wonderful beginning of the third quatrain, "The woman scorned"! Beautiful, and it tells us everything important we need to know, never mind the sordid details. Is there a better adjective to modify "magazine" than "national"?
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