The central question involves the poet's intent here, which I take to be gleefully light-hearted. I think he just wants to create a weird scenario, a fractured fairy tale by way of Fellini. If it doesn't quite come together, it is for the reasons Clive points out. Elements need to cohere and make "prose sense" even when the point may be nonsense.
This is the kind of subject matter that requires a poet to pull out all the stops; it also requires a perfect marriage of form and theme. I think, myself, that this poem cries out for rhyme and meter. E.g.:
When the butcher delivered the pork and the ham,
the turkeys, the pheasants, the mutton, the lamb,
guess who would dally with beggarman Sam?
Guess who would straddle the mystified hog…
Well, that might be an off-the-wall suggestion since this thread is all about nonmet poetry... but even if you stayed with a nonmet technique, you could still have so much more fun with this, Al.
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