I appreciate your taking a look at this. I will certainly follow up on the reading selections. Sam's poem was within easy reach. I'll check out the others.
I was concerned that the wiping away of the tear might seem a bit precious; my aim was to put old William present in the moment in a way he hadn't been earlier.
I tried to make the narrator kind of chatty and fussy about details, but I see what you mean: we don't learn much else about him. He's a device to tell the story, unlike the Duke of Ferrara. I also see that the revelation of William and Mary as the former owners of the bronze is contrived; it was a revelation to the narrator when it happened but not now in the retelling. Funny that never occurred to me before.
Your remarks have been very helpful. Thank you.
Bill
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