Very pleasing.
Although "piercing" usually does so by going "through" something and the redundancy here is not particularly acceptable.
As well:
When Dad gets up to sing along
their voices piercing through the air,
the neighbors know there's something wrong
and fall down on their knees in prayer.
Boy. Misplaced modifiers you say? How about misplaced everything?
This wonderful little thing deserves a fine tooth comb eh?
[This message has been edited by Maggie Porter (edited December 05, 2004).]
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