Thanks so much for all your comments on this poem. I received a lot of good advice when I workshopped it re the title and the need to change the original first line, amongst other things.
Carol, I wasn't thinking of a visiting to a children's ward, but, in a way, that seems appropriate to me, as patients in hospital do often seem to be treated like children, which makes them feel even more vulnerable.
Many thanks again,
Maz
[This message has been edited by grasshopper (edited December 08, 2004).]
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