His sonnet was a 7-footer, and I'm compressing it to a 5-footer, which seems to work best. But that line is awkward to make rime properly. As for contents, its a pretty mundane line just stating that it's been a long time since the poem ego had seem someone he just now spotted across the street. I might drop it in the Translation forum later, but I am trying to observe the 1 poem/week limit, so for now, it's in pre-crit universe here:
http://www.poeten.no/Forum/topic.asp?TOPIC_ID=48452
But the purpose of this thread was a more general inquiry, since I doubt that line wil last half a revision.
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Svein Olav (The poet formerly known as
Solan )