Caleb, I find it close to impossible to read two consecutive syllables as having the same stress. In English, that is. To do that, you have to take on a robot voice for those three syllables. In the previous example, the "had" does not receive great stress. But greater than "voys". If we go with the linguistic petimeters, I'd say
convoys had rolled by = 4 1 2- 2+ 3
That is: Rising all the way. Someone else's reading might switch the + and the -. The key is that "had" can't be read with as little stress as "-voys". Just try doing it!
As for how well written the sentence is, the grammarians would insist that a preposition just ain't the right thing to end a sentence with.
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Svein Olav
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