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Unread 05-02-2004, 07:14 AM
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Wildly mixing cultures, I pared one from the bone pile according to the 2/3/2 scheme. It may not be haiku, but it’s terza rima (down from 4/3/4 and, I hope, an improvement on the original):

Mezzogiorno

In Sicily
the summer’s old despair,
for I can see

the trees grown there
endure a sun that’s bled
through dusty air.

My forebears fled
this midday poverty
with roots half dead.

Transplants across the sea
revived their family tree.

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Ralph

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