Michael, it is interesting to see you poems after reading your comments on the "haiku and tanka" thread. (I hope you will have a chance to take a look at my response to that.)
What I find most striking is the difference in tone between the first and last two. The first two have the "lightness" of classical haiku; in the last two, the imagery has been replaced by rhetoric, a sign of contemporary senryu or zappai.
Interesting lot, all in all.
Lee
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