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Unread 05-02-2004, 04:53 PM
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I've long been fascinated by Haiku and Tanka....tanka in particular, because it gives me more room to roam in. I'm pretty sure that other than the syllable count, these two offerings arent actually haiku, but they are among my own personal favorites.

Blue Ridge

Listen to midnight
at the edge of the eyrie
two egg-teeth chipping

Come carrion hour
each gray-downed half-winged fledgling
turns face to the east

Observe the sunrise -
how it blinds men and opens
the eyes of eaglets
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In-Utero

benevolent garden
one foreign seed draws first breath
inhale - divide

three spores are scattered
six cells seek sanctuary
exhale - multiply

malignant conception
each silent new spawn mutates
inhale - exhale
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