Sory I haven't gotten back to this sooner, but here goes . . .
Curtis, I agree with your assessment . . . in your rondeau, "haiku" qualifies as an adjective but not a noun. Generally, effective haiku poems (as opposed to haiku stanzas in longer poems) rely on imagery, rather than statements for their magic. Also, they are normally able to stand alone, which most of these wouldn't be able to do.
RCL, I agree that your "Messogiorno" are not haiku , but terza rima and nicely done.
Alan, I think your "Hobie Haiku" are fun. Generally in haiku, shuch blatant punning is avoided, especially where the pun is in danger of becoming the point of the poem. I find the last works best as a haiku--it has a very nice feel. I will look forward to your next half hour's work!
Robt, Probably not. In general, the best haiku present two images and allow the reader to interact intuitively with them. A more (rationalistic) western approach presents one image and adds a thought or comment on the image to complete the poem. "Show don't tell" is the haiku way.
Lee
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