Thwo new:
three sunny days:
buds blossom;
three drops of rain:
umbrellas
*
Bird
shit on
NO TRESSPASSING
***
And two rewrites:
untouchable coal
smoldering in your red shirt--
grey will hem you in!
*
And because some things work better in other forms (!):
rites of rain
heavy
with the weight
of rain
a leaf uncups
drops
OK. I'll stop now. You've been very inspiring. Thank you!
Tom
[This message has been edited by nyctom (edited May 05, 2004).]
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