Tom,
Thanks for sharing the new poems—some interesting poems here. “Three sunny days” is interesting and fun. “Bird” is of course, simple irony. To tell you the truth, I would have preferred it to have been a BUSH/CHENEY sign. To tell you the truth, I haven’t got any idea what you are trying to get at with the “untouchable coal” piece—probably my failure.
As you might suspect, the perception involved in “rites of rain” is something many have experienced over the years, and falls in the category of a successful “sketch of life” (mentioned in an earlier post) whatever form you put it in.
Speaking of “other forms” for the past little while I have been writing in my own haiku in the actual form the Japanese use: Not 5-7-5 in three lines, but in a vertical line with one word to a line.
Lee
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