Thanks Lee, I see it is a delicate balance. You have
increased my appreciation for haiku enormously.
While it's fun trying to write one, reading them is
so much more enjoyable. Some of them are like little
explosions in the brain.
Yes, afer posting I realised the flaws in the second
poem, and that the first section was not really an image.
Rewrite:
four hundred children
chatter—crisp chalk
fresh blackboards
Renate
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