Lee
The categories of season words are a revealing addition to your teaching here. They give a great deal of direction. Thanks very much for your reply.
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Even the "Human affairs" list is so bucolic, one has to wonder how much contemporary life has strayed from the "human," at least by these standards.
As for the haiku I posted, you're right about the punctuation and adding the possessive; the improvement is evident, and thank you!
Aeolian harp's
wind-played song—
collecting seedpods
My meaning was this: the music is like the wind-blown seedpods collecting near the harp in the window. But the other seedpods are those in the mind of the listener, made by the harp's music and blossoming in the mind. I suppose that's elusive, like the music made by an Aeolian harp.
Thanks again for your generous teachings.
Terese
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