Henry—
Finally done with work and some chores, so I have the pleasure of responding to your haiku.
Yes, they do get under the skin. I don’t presume to suggest they should ever replace any other kinds of poems—each has its charm and its use. Like many, I wish that I were more talented than I am, but not being talented in many ways allows me the pleasure of others’ gifts.
I like your “apple trees” but wonder if “ripening” might be better? Also, in the haiku way of seeing things, “spring” is unnecessary here—it is implied. For example, “rose” would be a summer season word. If you wanted to suggest another season, you would then have to include it, e.g., “winter rose.”
Respectfully suggest that your “wrens” is a bit too busy.
And as for the third, simply a gem of Tonto and Tontoism!
Lee
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