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Unread 05-04-2008, 10:18 AM
David Rosenthal David Rosenthal is offline
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This is beautiful. It is first of all utterly convincing. I do not have any personal connections or associations to the action described in the title or the specific smells described in the first line, but I totally believe N does from the first. And the language is impeccable. The couplet is as good as they come. Also the rhymes are brilliantly done, in part because of the enjambments, which I personally find effective and well-crafted.

David R.
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