I dislike the enjambment to "upon," a preposition for which I have limited tolerance, especially in such a position. Also bothered by the lack of indefinite article. Why not just "on an accordian and clarinet?" But this is a very fine, wistful and wise sonnet. Second place on my list. Is the last phrase from the song?
[This message has been edited by Tim Murphy (edited May 05, 2008).]
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