Rogerbobby's point on adjectives is an interesting one, and good solid orthodox workshopping, but in this case, I think the relative lushness of modifiers is a smart move. A caged giraffe has a very different physicality than a giraffe, the implication being long neck, low ceiling, and the image wouldn't work without the adjective. A prostitute in boots could be a 45-year-old Texas hooker in ropers (not likely in Barcelona, I know, but you get my drift). I like the oddly phrased music as it implies a certain lack of precision, tells you something about the narrator. He's apparently a non-musician. The music sounds 'foreign', but he can't quite say why. And 'patched Baroque' is pitch-perfect.
Quincy
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