Hi Lee,
Thank you so much for reading these. I hope this can be much more than just making you work! lol
Old man content
His wife prepares his meal
Delicate salmon
"There is a little story here. The question is: why are we interested in the story? For me as a reader, it is not apparent why salmon brings content as opposed, say, shrimp or pizza. This poem, like most poems we read, "completes the circuit" for the reader. In my experience, the best haiku leave a gap and let the poem spark for the reader."
I struggled with this more than any. The salmon is meant to express the inevitability of growing old together happily. Drawn up the river to their destiny. It was:
Old man sits content
As his wife prepares a meal
Salmon are running
Perhaps I'm demanding too much or not conveying my intent clearly enough.
Best, Roy
"Curiously, there is a Japanese haiku poet that has made a career of hippopotamus haiku. (I can't recall his name, but if anyone is interested, I can get it.)"
This, coupled with my inexplicable interest in Samurai swords convinces me that I must have become partly Japanese, at some point.
[This message has been edited by Roy Hamilton (edited October 15, 2008).]
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