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Unread 10-16-2008, 07:39 PM
Lee Gurga Lee Gurga is offline
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Originally posted by Seree Zohar:
Shalom Lee

we read, we try to learn and we'll see just how much by your (much appreciated) comments - and so, another beginner charges (in):

And shalom to you, Seree. We are all beginners in a sense, myself included. Most days I, too, am humbled by haiku.


Tulips, a fine spray
Bloemenmarket's scented carpet
guaranteed never-shrink

Mist powders gracht* foliage
faster than scant sun-breezes dust:
water off cygnets’ backs

“The Jewish Bride” hosts
immaculate despite centuries
dead flies at her hem

[*canal]

As in my comments to Martin, I would like to see more open-endedness in your haiku. I will look forward to more. (Also, could you tell me why "The Jewish Bride" is in quotes?) Lee
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