Lee,
thank you so much for comment--I am flattered to get more
critical comments. I hadn't even thought of the
macabre reading of the first haiku, and I see what you mean about
the closeness--indeed the color of the the afternoon light is very
close to the blush of the cheek. I'll have to think about how to
add a bit more of a spark, intensify the blush.
The muskrat is too much a description.
Thanks for enjoying the bratwurst--what would Basho and Kikaku say?
Thanks again for all your time.
Martin
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