Donna,
Being haiku novices we are obviously under the gun. Lee said to me:
Most effective haiku are made up of two parts that interact imaginatively. It is more difficult to get the same kind of interaction with three parts--a three part haiku often feels disjointed and is harder for the reader to "put together."
This is the pitfall that I see here:
Christmas morning feed
icicles in the horses tails
little bells jingling
But I've been wrong before.
Although I suppose L2 & L3 could be considered linked.
[This message has been edited by Roy Hamilton (edited October 17, 2008).]
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