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Originally posted by Mary Meriam:
Sure, I can see how the Billy Collins' I posted isn't a haiku.
Lee, I've got three more, if you have a chance to crit (be brutal!). Thanks.
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Well, it is hard to imagine wanting to be brutal, especially with these.
black wing
white moon
first frost
Remember what I said about not using three images? Well, here is the exception that tests the rule--and overthrows it. I like this one very much.
cherry tomatoes
teardrops of
a lonely old fool
i think a lot of people would really like this one, but it is a tad sentimental for you taste. But what do i know? It could well be a prize-winner!
muse
my vase is broken
without you
Like this one too, especially as i know the feeling so well!
Lee