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Unread 10-20-2008, 07:19 AM
Lee Gurga Lee Gurga is offline
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Originally posted by Seree Zohar:
Lee - - this began as a jumble of thoughts, then a sentence of just over 100 words, then compacted as follows. Your crit appreciated, thanks.

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a fresh mound
barely cold
earthworms charged

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Cally - I very much enjoyed the breath on the glass!
David R - your professor: innit just!

Seree, this is interesting, but i am afraid you lost me with 'charged' in the third line. if you could give me some help, i might be able to make a meaningful comment. thanks.

Lee

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